Love how it starts off bro! Right into it and hums along a travelling rhythm!
And yeah wouldn’t hurt to add some extra elements like a lead, some drum fills to differentiate every 8 or 16… but don’t underestimate the power of effects! Something I’m trying to do more of myself. Sometimes we get locked into building and adding more to a tune when maybe its already there and all we have to do is “shape” it!

Listening to this live during our ‘GoodHood Watch’ chat was a privilege! Something about listening with THE ARTIST who made the tune elevates the experience! Or perhaps even being able to gain insights to the rationale behind the lyrics… the purpose of the song sort of gave it a whole other dimension.

It’s interesting to me, coz its not as if mentioning the background and the ‘why’ of a song in an upload would really hit-home as much as it did when you shared it on the call. Which makes me think about how music is interpreted generally by listeners when they receive the final product… they don’t necessarily get to have that 1on1 chat with the artist (which is why watching interviews are so cool, coz we get those insights that are otherwise left out in the release).

Regardless, I don’t think its a must-have to explicitly state the reasons of a tune, which could be argued that its the whole point of art; is to interpret reality in such a way that isn’t quite as painful as the subject itself. Super great talking points!

But I am incredibly impressed with what you’ve got here bro and can’t wait to see where you take it as rahmsc has mentioned. The Sub Fatty bass really comes through nicely. Keen to see how you end up processing the vocals as well for the Final Cut. Definitely a keeper!

Dig the vibe! Like the laid back flow as a style and aesthetic 🙂
Mix wise, def watch out for those lower frequencies in your voice that may add to muddiness. Besides obviously the acoustics of where you’re recording, you could look into layering to creatively “thin” out those lower frequencies.

Some basic ways you could experiment with is by duplicating the Vox track and cutting the highs on one and lows on the other, and even a 3rd for the mid range, and then apply some “rooming” effect to the highs ever so lightly, while surgically going to town on where the muddiness is after scanning with the analyzer tool to get a proper read of the frequency.

Otherwise, I think def experiment with how you’d like to process your vocals, as this is a whole area to harness besides the beats, a super dope adventure to embark on!

That gap at 1:14 tho! Reminds me how sometimes we tend to try and do too much for fills when a well crafted mute on most/if not all tracks, does the job – especially when you do it a tad bit early and brought it back the way you did.

Re: spoken word… what sort of vocal range do you have in mind/think would suit? And with your own vocal chops, are you looking to have someone else on the credits over the convenience of doing it yourself? Lovin the tune so far as per my guy x